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1.to use more interesting words
2.to make first sentence better
3.DON’T forget paragraph.
Archery
Camp.I always dreamed about it cause, i never been to it.I think my most interesting and memorable for me was archery.
The reason why i choose archery was cause i never tried it before and wanted to try it.
When we(KIWI) arrived at the field, there was arrows and bows, one of bows was bigger than others.Then she introduce herself and show the sharp part of the arrow.
First, we learned basic but important thing by ‘step by step’. After that we had a go for it Zara was my partner for it. I pulled the first bow string in my life and aim for the middle of the target. “You can do this!”
I was really concentrate that i didn’t smell or hear.I leave my finger let it go.My arrow flew and went to grass.
After few more go, Katie blew the balloon and put it on the target.I was the last one in our team.We were allowed to shoot 3 arrows.I felt i’m really wet cause my sweat.I had deep breath and my first arrow went to ground again i was very sad and upset but shoot one more arrow.”OH MY GOD!!” I popped the balloon.I felt happy and successful.Everyone in our team cheered.And my last goal i got red i wished if i got one more balloon or yellow but it’s ok.I felt really successful.I really liked archery and wants to do it again.
